All I Wanted. - Comments

Really great! I enjoyed that a lot, it was sweet

I really loved this! It was amazing! Amazing job!

this was really good(: i enjoyed reading it a lot, especially since they seemed so you and you portrayed that well throughout the story with the little details you added. great job on the story overall and good luck(:

This was great :)
You used great descriptions, and I loved the little bits that showed that the boys were still young - the spongebob boxers, even the whipped cream showed that they weren't quite the typical characters you find in smuts.
I spotted a few little grammar/spelling errors, but other than that it was pretty fantastic.
The beginning was really sweet, even if a bit unrealistic, which I don't mind at all, and the sex was damn hot.
Wonderful job!

You know? Usually seeing the word "bowels" in a sex scene would be kind of a turn off, if you know what I mean, but somehow you make it seem completely normal.
Really, I like that you did that kind of thing throughout the story. You described things that most (including me) probably wouldn't include, like 'bowels' and 'pubic hair' and all those things that usually aren't associated with "sexy".
Somehow, you really pulled that off a lot, and that's great.
I also love the back-story behind the couple. Since you mentioned that they'd basically been together since they were 14/15 years old and that they were getting married, it added an extra level of depth to this, instead of it just being sex, sex and more sex.
On those same lines, though, I like that you put the disclaimer about it being just sex on the summary page, because i know from personal experience that some people don't pay attention to the contest(s) that the story was written for, and then say things along the lines of, "it was great, but it needed more to it. There wasn't much more than sex in it". (I've gotten that several times on a pure-sex one-shot I have.)
But anyways, I think this is the longest comment I've left on a story that wasn't for a contest of mine, but I really did love this.

Wow, this was really well written.
Not many people can write in third person as well as you do. Well, I know I can't.
I really liked how you described things so perfectly. The beginning was fantastic, because usually people start right into names and such, but you kept it as if the writer didn't know they're names; if that makes sense. I really did like it.
And great song choice C: I liked that too xD
I just finished reading this and I really have to go, but all in all I loved it :D