As a first story, i think you're off to a good start. Your writing is good, but as you continue to write you will improve. As far as formatting the story, i think that is something you should consider. Formatting helps readers read the story easier and can really help the reader understand what you're trying to convey. I've only read a couple chapters, but you are good at character development. Keep up the good job! And continue to write! Practice makes perfect!
February 23rd, 2013 at 09:26pm