Starless Night - Comments

I'm really interested in what could happen here. I usually love WWII stories, and this one is no exception. This is realistic and believable, really good. I like it.

I was so hoping I’d find a story along these lines on Mibba. And now I have! :D

I’m extremely curious as to where to goes, especially after finding out that he doesn’t know she’s Jewish. That’s sure to lead to a very interesting conversation, so long as he doesn’t find out from someone else…That wouldn’t be good!

Anyway, the first two chapters were very good and rather realistic, especially the ‘conversation’ she had with her father; it certainly left me eager for more. It has a lot of potential, so I really hope you continue =) I’m definitely subscribing.

First things first, I'm not a big fan of the layout but those are trivial things. The first chapter was kind of..cute O.O Haha. i don't really have a better word for it.It's like the beginnings of a really great love story...until you hit the ominous "I didn't know what that would mean" thing.

The second chapter is so real. It's something that happened--and still does--everyday. People not accepting others for their religion/race. It's a real concept that so far, you've captured beautifully. I feel for Els (that's what I'm calling her). I just kind of wish you slowed things down a bit.

All in all I like it.

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I'm so looking forward to reading new chapters, so please please update!

There was a little bit of missing punctuation (commas and such) in the summary, but it wasn't distracting or hard to read.
In chapter one, the only thing I noticed was crouch, should be crouched. You have a lot of short sentences that could be strung together a bit with some commas.
Chapter two was also well written.

I really like what you're writing about. I am silently obsessed with anything (books, memorabilia, stories, history) about the Holocaust, so I'm interested to see where you take it.

Like Nikki said though, ti does seem modernized, which isn't a bad thing, it just makes it a little less realistic. Wonderful story though!! I love it!

I loved this story it was really good. It's hard to believe that some people thought the Holocaust was fake.

Okay, so... I read this because I was very intrigued by the short description. While I was reading it however, it seemed more... modernized than somebody that was actually living in that time era. I'm not saying that it's bad or anything... I simply believe that you modernized it a little bit. But either way, I'm interested in reading the rest of this story. *subscribes*
~Kayla

Subscribed :) Please update! :D

Yay! First comment! & Love Holocaust stories! Please keep updating I like it so far!