Unrehearsed - Comments

This is really good
(:

This is a very good telling of Faye's life.
Hopefully Frank will wize up and realize f he stops provoking Faye half the shit that happens on that bus will stop.

killallurfriends918:

I really like this story. I think you have a good, fresh idea in which you can keep going. I would work on reading some regular novels, and not just a bunch of fanfiction though. (Which I think you may be doing) I find that when you read pretty much nothing but fanfiction, your writing becomes kind of bland, and you don't develope a style of your own. Where as with novels, the people are already developed writers, and you can learn a lot from them. But there's nothing wrong with reading a fic or two. :) Good luck, and keep your updates coming.

I'm glad your comment wasn't you being a complete asshole, and you gave some good advice, but the thing is, most of this site has fanfictions, if you can't tell. A lot of the writers on this website (including the fan fiction writers) are amazing writers, and this website is here to help people become "fully developed" writers.

Also, don't be so quick to judge. You don't know if she reads novels or not, only she knows that.

there was only so many times that Ray could just sleep his way through it.
:lmfao
That had me rolling. Ray's so funny.

I really like this story. I can't wait for more!

I love it!! Please update soon!!!

Ill Give You 3 Smiles If You Continue...
XD =3 >.< there...

Ooooh, I like the sound of this, yesh yesh!
I demand that you continue you it =]
*is no good at leaving comments*
<3

I really like this story. I think you have a good, fresh idea in which you can keep going. I would work on reading some regular novels, and not just a bunch of fanfiction though. (Which I think you may be doing) I find that when you read pretty much nothing but fanfiction, your writing becomes kind of bland, and you don't develope a style of your own. Where as with novels, the people are already developed writers, and you can learn a lot from them. But there's nothing wrong with reading a fic or two. :) Good luck, and keep your updates coming.