I enjoyed reading this story. It was a very interesting read and I enjoyed what it was about and how it flowed. Some of the contents could be worded differently to better catch the attention of readers and help them read more comfortably. Also when I first started reading I couldn't tell whet you were trying to write about and sometimes that gains the loss of readers. All in all the story was good. It is not the best I have read but its a start to whole lot more. You have the makings of a great writing here, you just need to work on details and flow. Sincerely, auroraklg
Sincerely,
auroraklg