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December 31st, 2012 at 09:59pm
For the All Dialogue Contest:
First Impressions:
title- i've always loved the word 'Duplicity'...
layout- gasp! MGMT! That's a happy day! :D Well, the layout is alright. It's clean and simple.
Content:
general plot stuff- I really enjoyed this. There was a little bit of an awkward shift in the emotions towards the middle of the story, but it was still a good read. :) I really liked the way that the characters talked. It wasn't formal, like it sometimes can be and it perfectly fit the setting. Very cool. I liked how you wrote 'the biggest size you got', rather than 'the biggest size you've got'. Because hardly anyone bothers to say, 'you've'. Very nice. :)
grammar/crap they teach you in the fifth grade- It appears that everything is order. Kudos to you.
Overall:
I love MGMT (Especially Andrew Van Wyngarden) and this was a lovely little piece, though I'd like to see what happens next... Good job. :)
