Seasons Change - Comments

awsome plot so far keep updating.

This story is very good, the description grabs me. But the first few sentences bore me, but that may not be true for everyone. The background was nice, but I had to push myself to read it. After the fist couple paragrahs it was good :) You've got talent =D

I like this story a lot! the first few paragraphs with his mother are really emotional too. It gave me goose bumps really. I love the southern drawl and I can picture it really well since I live in the rural south. your description is really good too. I think that I have nothing bad to say about this first chapter just some warnings that I have. I see a lot of people with your writing style try to speed through the plot. things happen too fast and stuff gets given away too quickly. Don't do that! Also think about the actions of the people other then your character and make sure that what they do makes sense. I think that Tyler wouldn't have offered him a room out of the blue like that even if they were country folk. maybe you should fill that part out with some more dialouge. other then that please keep writing!!!!! You have a lot of talent!

The title is a little flat, I think it needs a tad more spice in it.

And turducken already mentioned it, but "his mother" is, in fact stated twice in the summary. Oh and I like the name Zeke, it's original and not normally seen, but it's not overly crazy either.

I have never read a story about shape shifters on here that is original, so the summary made me get pretty excited. =D

The way you wrote the first few paragraphs evokes so many emotions. The mother seems bitter-sweet to me, I feel like she loves her son, but because he is a "freak" she can't keep him around. And the kid is so confused, I feel for the boy as I'm reading.

Oh and I find that southern drawl effect in the dialogue of the boy so cute, reminds me of my cousin.

"Oh," I try to hid my smile - hide

I'm curious about the Tyler fella's history, I want to know more about him. And the way you described the shifting was really awesome, the description was superb. Good writing in this story, honest truth. I think you have a lot of potential in here, this story can gain a lot of attention if you cultivate it the right way.

=D You're doing really great and I hope you enjoy my story as much as I enjoyed this one.

In the summary you put "his mother" twice. But otherwise, the summaries quite interesting, a little short but interesting nonetheless, holds that air of mystery.I'm a little confused on why you struck out his name but I feel like this new tribe is going to give him a new one or something.

MAYBE? I don't know, I just like guessing things and hoping I'm right.

I've never read anything about Shapeshifters before (well, other than Twilight but you know) so I think this'll be interesting to get some new knowledge on these mythical creatures. :)

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His Southern sort of drawl (I don't know, he says momma so I just hear him say it like that) makes him sound so adorable and then when she said all those mean things my heart like broke. How even though she's saying those horrible things he's still thinking nice about her, which makes it even more sad. He seems so innocent and adorable!

"I cain't" can't?

I can't believe that she'd kill him. HE IS TOO ADORABLE. And he seems so scared and vulnerable and I don't want her to be so mean to him. And I don't know about this random guy that picks up strangers on the side of the road. It must be his undeniable cuteness, it must be. I don't want him to die though!

Not like he will because it's just the beginning and characters don't die in the beginning. The thought's still there.

Well, okay, Tyler seems nice. I like how open he is though, just meets a stranger and tells them that "yeah my girlfriend own't sleep with me." I can appreciate that sort of honesty, aha.

I thought the shift was pretty cool, you have some really good descriptions hiding in there, this is a really good story so far. It has a lot of potential, I think. I'd like to see where you go with this! :)

Title

I find the title quite dull, honestly. That may just be me, though. =\

Layout

The layout is pretty and I love the design in the background!

Summary

This is very interesting--I love a good Shape-Shifter story! And I feel sorry that Zeke is not accepted by his mother. I can't help but feel a little excited to see what the tribe is searching for and if they will come to trust their new member.

One question, though--why is Zeke's name crossed out?

Chapter 1: One - Zeke

I really enjoyed the beginning. I hated what happened to the poor boy, it made me want to cry along with him. No one should get abandoned by their own parents. But then, Tyler came in and I'm happy he showed Zeke kindness. The Shift was easy to imagine with the grand details you put to it.

I can't help but wonder when he first realized he was a Shifter...

"just have some recessive jeans"
^ jeans should be genes

"I can hear every sound out hear"
^ hear should be here

Overall

I really liked this and I'm subbing to read more.

UPDATE SOON!! <3 <3

I adore this and am excited to see where you take it. Your description is beautiful, your grammar is varied and broad - you're not repetitive at all. The hurt and emotion is so true in this story; I don't think his mam is horrible at all, I think she loves her boy, but there's something more to it. This is totally worth continuing!