i just read all of this and i really like it a lot! i hardly comment on stories anymore, but this one is amazing. i love how mysterious it all is. you are giving away a little bit but not revealing too much all at the same time, which really makes me want to keep reading about what that greasey man is all about and why he is bothering her and blackmailing her and the thing she has to do with zacky and what matt's job is. its all so mysterious and exciting! i really like your writing as well, though i noticed a few small typos, best to re-read through but i know how ones can miss your eyes. after i read through mine, a few just slip pass me! well i am really excited to see where this is going to go. im like on the edge of my seat wanting to know all the secrets! please update again soon!
i really hope to see more of this soon, it's incredible. I stayed up for hours to read it and raced home to get as much read as possible just to realize that after two pages there was no more. Anyway it's so interesting, can't wait to read more of it. c: