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First of all, I love your title and the layout complements it perfectly. Your summary is also great and pulls you in. I think it'd be even more effective if you took out the first "James Owen Sullivan" though. Love, love, love all the questions though.

The way this was written was so clever and just really beautiful. The weaving in of the memories was masterful; truly seamless.

It really packed an emotional punch too. All those words and that anger Bree feels to the present time was just heart-breaking. You got the dynamics of their relationship perfect and that just made it all so much worse and gave so much more impact.

The final line was just devastating, but rounded off this story so well.

Gorgeous and almost had me in tears.

Good luck in the contest!

So for not being into the fandom of The Rev. I liked it a lot. I like how you go into detail. It made me feel like I was the one going through this. I also really liked how easily you went back and forth from the present to the past. A well written story in my eyes. Good job :)

the layout was really beautiful, and I think it was really beautifully written. My eyes started watering truth be told. You did a wonderful job(:

That was so sad :( I love Jimmy and to think about somebody finding him dead on the couch is really sad. You used a lot of big words which was good and you have a beautiful style of writing that makes me enjoy everything you write.

I did catch one mistake, well two: The cabin as were everything had begun, and also where everything had ended. - as should be was and were should be where. :) 

Wow this one really made me tear up :( poor thing, I don't know what I'd do if something like that happened to me! This was really well written and the perfect length, and I think you summed up the picture really well :)