I really like this, I agree with daninatt11 when I read this it was a little hard to make out some words. But I thought it was really good. I really hope that you make this into an actual story :D
One thing you could improve on, I love the pattern on the layout, but it kinda' clashes with the text colour, maybe it's just me, but I thought I'de put that out there.
I love how as I read the story, you described perfectly the feeling of heartbreak a person experiences, in Elijah, moments like that can bring readers to feel as the characters do.
I enjoyed this. Sydney seemed horrible, and Elijah was just too perfect. I could perfectly picture everything in my head from your words, which is always nice. I didn't see any mistakes at all. Good job!