August 18th, 2011 at 11:30pm
I kinda glanced at the summary, and the date next to Orwell's name - in my head - read as 1984 ;) Safe to say that when I looked back at the summary after reading the story...it made a whole lot more sense. ;) Granted, it also kind of made sense in regards to 1984... :)
Benjamin alone knew that life had remained quite the same, except now touched with the cynicism of a satire woven into a great and woeful tale. - These were the lines that really stood out to me in the story. I think the language is really beautiful behind them, and I like the use of cynicism...satire...tale. I think those words really capture the entirety of the piece and the outer issue of the narrative. :) I've only read the first few chapters of Animal Farm, but I like to think I can imagine the type of plot it had, from history. And I think with what you wrote, you give it a justice of sorts. You keep bringing back that old world they had loved, and it just reinforces the contrast between that and Stalin and what had happened since. :) It's a really lovely piece, I think you wrote it quite nicely. :)
He's such a sad, old, bitter man. It's a shame really. You actually had me so pulled into the story that I was practically screaming at him to improve himself while I read this. You balanced the simplicity of the scene with the complexity of the emotions and thoughts so very well, that I couldn't help but feel as though it was really happening before my eyes. You were able to capture a life in which everything's passed already, and that feeling of everything being lost. I feel so badly for him! Then again, I feel like he wasted his last moments, which is a bigger shame.
Seriously, this was so well written! Look at my comment! I can't keep from talking about it like it's real! I saw no mistakes that I can remember off-hand, the layout was gorgeous (though I'm far less picky about layouts, than most). It was a joy to read! ^_^