Oh Lord, Don't Tell Me This Is Happening - Comments

love the update, and yay!! they having a baby boy!

Haha I see the 'Hey Baby, Here's that Song You Wanted' resemblance in this. Pretty good, and again, I don't read stories like this often, but it's Blessthefall, so it's an exception. Good story ^.^

i seriously love this!!! *Subscribe!*

Okay, I'm not going to sugarcoat this. I'm really...not a big fan of this story. I've never really liked these types of plots.

The layout is okay. I think it would be nice to see something more than just a mixture of colors and a picture. Perhaps a light pattern would work in the background. But, it didn't hurt my eyes at all, which is important.

I see grammatical errors frequently in this story. I even saw one in the summary. It can get a little distracting, sometimes, to tell you the truth. Maybe you should get a beta to check out your story and fix your sentence structures.

I also see a lack of description in this story, and a surplus of dialogue. If you added a lot more detail, the story would flow well and the readers would feel like it would be written more professionally.

Good job so far, and keep up the good work. <3

nice story. lol Ashree. loved your update bby.
poor them havin to hear them fuckin xD