Okay, so... I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY!! This is great! The emotion is raw, and, well, the suspense is amazing! Yet, I must say, it's eating me alive. I want, no, need more! You MUST continue writing, I have to know what happens next!(: LOVEEE IT! Keep up the good work :D -Tika(:
I'm really liking this story so far. But it seems like you left out a word or something in the first sentence, either that or I'm reading it wrong. You also left out the quotation marks at the beginning there. Oh my god! Andi! Get off!" I giggled to end, pushing the lump of a nineteen-year-old body off mine.
Also, you left out the 'w' in 'was' here: There, standing in front of me for the first time in five years, as Mr. Sterner. Mr. Andi Sterner.
I don't mean to come off so harsh or anything because I do like the story already and can't wait to see what happens next, but I thought I should let you know. I would also suggest that you go back over the chapter and fix the punctuation errors. The punctuation errors aren't anything too major or anything just something I noticed while reading. Like I said, I'm liking this story and I can't wait to see what's going to happen next.