Freedom, She Sings - Comments

The layout's really nice. I wish I could make decent layouts.

What I really like about this prologue is the tone of it, and the dialect of the character. First person isn't a favorite of mine, but when you mix it into the character's personality and the way they talk, it makes it so much more interesting. Which is something you accomplished with it, I really felt like she was telling me her story.

And when she said she just couldn't leave, how she felt responsible? I know exactly how she feels, that's completely realistic. People ask me all the time why I don't do things, and it's because I feel responsible, like I need to do something.

So that's a reality factor you have working with this story, and frankly, it's really working. I don't know where she plans on going or where she'll end up, but I really hope, in the end, she'll become free and she'll get the freedom she wants. I know how she feels, maybe not to her extent, but I get what she's saying.

Very nice way of writing it, especially in first person.

This is really interesting! I've seen stories about this kind of thing before, but none of them were written like this, in such a way that really caught my attention and left me wanting to know more. You have a gift with words, my dear! (This will also be the first of the sort that I will be subscribing to.) :D

I like this already. I love the child like need she harbors. I think this is a fabulous start and I can see this shooting off in a lot of directions.

The summary instantly captured my attention, I really wanted to find out what was going on, and the description you used was lovely :3

I loved the dialect you used, it gave a very unique feeling to the story and the style you used was just so easy to read, I really loved it. I really like the first line, and how it starts with talking about her childhood. My favourite part has got to be the last few lines. It is so intriguing! I'm subscribing because I can't wait to see what happens next! :)

I must say, I love this layout and the banner. :D
The summary is a hook, line, and sinker. ;)

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The first paragraph made me laugh a bit, though it's sad her mom didn't have any faith in her. :/

I really love how you describe the main character's background as the story goes along. It's so sad but it's realistic though. And the song you used sounds interesting now you make me want to listen to the song. X3

This was a nice start, Gatsby. I'm subbing. Let me know when you update, okies? <3333

:D This is an interesting start.
I like how she has a good reason for not leaving and how, even when they acted like she didn't exist or treated her badly, she stuck around because she felt obligated to do so. It wasn't that she was to weak to strike out on her own or anything like that. Though I don't know her name, I already like her. I hope to see more soon!