Congratulations, I Hate You - Comments

I honestly find this story impossible to read. I have no idea what's going on because of how distracting the lack of line breaks are and the evident grammar mishaps. If you want help fixing these things, let me know and I'll for sure help you with a few chapters!

While I may not be able to comprehend anything that's going on, I'm sure that your writing is wonderful and will be even better if (and when) everything is fixed. I think it definitely has potential to be an incredible story and I wish you all the best! xo

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First thing I noticed, the layout! It's interesting. I have no idea what fandom you're writing about, though. Second thing, it's a tad hard to read. Try spacing out paragraphs. Thirdly, your grammar. Especially dialogues. Make sure you use commas, correct captitalization, etc. It will make your story go a long way. The content was entertaining, though.

First off, it's against the rules to not include spacing between your paragraphs, so you should definitely go back and leave a space between each paragraph because this story could be reported. The lack of paragraph breaks also makes the story incredibly difficult to read.

Though I enjoyed the banter and conversations between the characters, I have to admit that, as a reader that isn't familiar with the fandom you're writing in, I had no clue who all these people were, and I felt like it was a little too-much-too-soon. I get that this is fanfiction, so you expect that most people reading this story will be familiar with the fandom, but that isn't the case. I couldn't really get enough of a grasp on the characters to really enjoy the story because all I had were just names to work with, so I feel like you should definitely try to incorporate some description.

Overall, I felt like this has potential and I wish you luck as you continue to work on it.

Hi! :) I'm still interested in reading this if you want to make a sequel. But don't think you have to just because of me :)

This story can't end! All the chapters are so much fun and amusing.

Four kids? Damn, Chris must be good. But now I can't stop picture Chris falling out of his chair at the news. This is way too amusing.

So many updates, it exciting. And Ashley and Chris are engaged. Yay!

Yay! They're pregnant. Wait, that sounds weird, since Chris isn't actually going through the pregnancy, he's just the father. But anyways...

Aww. Chris will be a good dad. But what did the tests say?

The lack of chapter titles is fine with me. But damn, I want that ring.

Another good chapter.

It was worth the wait. The Strip...I was just down there the other day. I haven't been to the Rio in a few years though. And I don't want to think about Paris; I have to be there, functioning somewhat properly, at 5am in a few weeks.

I'm just seeing red behind the story part, and just a blank white space next to it on the right. I'm going to check out your other story. Chances are, I won't be able to take it over because I currently have three of my own stories going, even though one is almost finished. But with school, It takes long enough to update already. Sorry.

Ash and James have to go with Chris. There's no reason why they shouldn't.

So many people in love with Ash...But she has to go back to Chris! She has to!

I feel so special. But people are still being lame and not commenting. But this story isn't lame, which is why I'm still reading it and showing my love for it.

What is peoples problem? Why am I the first to comment on this? It is the sequel, but seriously. Anyways...I love the story and can't wait for the next chapter. And good luck with the play. Or break a leg if that's what you prefer.