Fucktangle - Comments

This was really interesting. I enjoyed the background and the plotline. I think the way it played out, like she knew it wasn't her fault that they were divided but wanted to stop anyway. I also think it was realistic up until the very end when Sarah forgave them. She seemed like she hated them way to much to forgive them. So if she hadn't been so extreme or if she hadn't forgiven them I think the ending would've been better. But that was the only part I doubted. I liked how real this was. It wasn't just a story, it was someone's life. Even if that was fiction(after the first part) it still seemed like it was life. Fucktangle was also a brilliant name for this. I think it's very interesting and perfectly describes the situation.

Good luck with your fucktangle. :)

Oh goodness xD

So, um, first of all... FINALLY A STORY ABOUT BAND KIDS AND THEIR DRAMA!
*pantpant*

Yeah, just kinda got excited there.
Anyways, I like it xD It's a sort of funny way to do a story, as like a sort of alternate reality. And normally, crossed out lines are annoying, but how you dealt with it was brilliant. It worked really well. And the title fit brilliantly as well.
I kind of want to go read the real version, just because this is so, "...wut?" And points to you for Sarah being an actual human being.
There were a couple spots where the grammar needs to be cleaned up (like missed quote marks and little stuff like that) but it's overall pretty good.

Love it! And I'd read the real life version so you should write it! :D
You should make it last longer than just one more chapter though...just saying :P
Update soon! :)

you have to keep writing i love it sooo much and its funny cause Jessie reminds me of myself and how i talk and think its hilarious! please keep it going!

This is really good and interesting. I love the layout and I can't wait for the next chapter. I'd read a story about the real thing

The Layout

I am not a big fan of any of it. I like that the font is big but that's about all. I don't like the stars or the orange or the picture.

Fucktangle

This is quite interesting. I love the entire 'idea' of this story, although you say it's based on your real life? I read that right, right? I didn't find any grammatical errors which I am glad to see. I can really picture what's going on. It's this whole awkward stage for a 14 year old boy, but the 17 year old girl has a bit more experience, even if by a little. I like that you've called it a 'fucktangle.' I don't think I've ever heard that word before, even though it's not really word in the dictionary...I've never heard it in slang before, if you catch my drift?

Honestly in real life, none of it will matter once people have moved away and/or have gone to college. It'll just be apart of your memory and nothing more. Unless you settle for this guy, you really shouldn't put too much thought into having a girl/boyfriend. I'm in my thrid semester of college and when I think back on all the stupid shit I did in high school, I'm like I should have listened to my mother.

I know that sometimes you can't ignore your feelings for another human being, but don't get yourself in too deep. There are other fish in the sea, whether you'll think you'll find someone or not. Having a boy/girlfriend isn't what life is about, unless that's your only goal.

Trust me, you are going to want to have 'fun.' in college or later in life.

PLEASE UPDATE SOON! <3

This seemed so interesting, so I subscribe. And I was right! Can't wait for the next part:)!