October 7th, 2011 at 02:23pm
You are so right, Alice. This was horrible and I was not impressed in the slightest. I JUST HATE IT SO MUCH. I WASTED SO MUCH TIME BEGGING. Only that's all a lie. I FREAKING LOVE THIS SO MUCH ALREADY. It's so brilliant and if I were a dude, I'd bend Kendall over a table just because he was going to be a German teacher. My Oma and Opa would be proud. If you use any of the language and aren't sure about it, feel free to ask me. If I don't know I can ask any of my cousins / grandparents / parents / etc. Anyway, this was just the most brilliant start to what I know is going to be the most glorious story of all time. It's going to be my personal mission to do as much as I possibly can to make sure this story has at least 100 comments, tons of subscribers, and ten stars by the time it's all over with. I'm not willing to do that for many people - if any at all. I just love your writing so much and you're one of only two authors on my favorite authors list. I just can't tell you how freakin' happy I got when you left the link in my comments.
I legit could have cried from happiness.
Anyway, as I promised in my first comment - every five chapters you will be getting an at least 2,000 word review. JUST BECAUSE I PROMISED AND I ALREADY LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH.
I also cried a little inside when I saw that you dedicated this chapter to me. But I was also upset that you doubted I would like it. At this point Alice, you can do no wrong to me in the writing world. <3
Fantastic first chapter. :')
BUT, it was an excellent chapter and definitely met my expectations. Though it did feel a little rushed to me, but that's not a terribly huge deal. I like how you made it a little flash back to sort of what happened. I was totally grossed out when it said he could feel blood running down his face. Just EW. Blood grosses me out big time. But I thought he was hit by a car or something. Guess not, though. But then when I find out that he got the shit beat out of him, I wonder WHY. I instantly thing that some assholes decided to play "smear the queer" or "beat the straight into him" and I would probably cry if that were the case. I JUST LOVE HIM SO MUCH, NIC. Y U MAKE HORRIBLE THINGS HAPPEN TO HIM?!
I loved how Cecil was just there from the start. . .ish. You know what I mean? I can tell that he's just a good hearted person. Not a lot of people would have done what he did. Some probably would have just turned their head and kept walking. But not Cecil! He's a good person and that makes me love him. Lots. And I could just HEAR the urgency in his voice when he called 911. I also heard sirens in the background as Kendall grabbed Cecil's hand. And I cried a little at that point. It was just so sweet and cute that I could have DIED. Yes. Could have died from that cuteness. And then came back from the dead so I could read more of this bomb-ass story.
I NEED TO KNOW WHO BEAT THE SHIT OUT OF KENDALL AND ALL ABOUT CECIL. OMFG. I AM ON THE EDGE HERE, NIC. I AM. AND I LOVE YOUR GUTS OUT FOR IT!
And I got really happy when I saw that this chapter was for me, too. :'D
Three more chapters and you get your first 2,000 word review. :'D