You have a good plot but your story seems rushed. You should slow it down with more detail so it makes more since. Sorry! This is just a sugguestion of course naturally you don't have to listen to it. I really do like where this is going but at times when reading it I get confused cause its so rushed. But I do wish you would continue it because I'm sure it's gonna be an amazing story! :)
Sorry! This is just a sugguestion of course naturally you don't have to listen to it. I really do like where this is going but at times when reading it I get confused cause its so rushed. But I do wish you would continue it because I'm sure it's gonna be an amazing story! :)