Thunder Wolf - Comments

I LOVE THIS STORY ALL READY!!!!!!! update soon plz! I love the layout! its sooooooo cute!

I am loving the layout. The white of the wolf really goes well with the light and dark colors of your layout.

I really love the plot of your story. Although it does seem a little bit complex, I love the way that you created such a world that is your own. Your land has a name, there is a ruler, and there are legends. I just love that. And you talk about them in such great detail. They seem so developed. The whole history of your story seems completely developed, even though you created it. I really respect authors that take the time to create such a complete and amazing world.

Your description is beautiful. You describe the wolves, and the people in this story, with such vivid and detailed description.

I think it is fantastic that you are writing a lot of this story from a dog's perspective. Many people can't pull it off right, because they make it sound childish, but you really pull it off. This canine is so attentive and pays attention, and you don't miss any of the plot. I love that the wolves seem human, and that the wolf that you write the perspective from is so caring.

I was so surprised by the announcement. I thought it was great that you focused so much on it. You included detail about the wolves that came with them, and the speech that he gave sounded so formal and official.

Great job!

Thanks guys for your helpful comments! Means a lot and trust me, we put every bit of your opinions and constructed criticism to thought to see how we can improve! Thanks for not being silent readers :)

-Kookiezz

layout; simple and pretty! (:

tile; immediately intriguing.

story; you are very good at descriptive scenes, and I found it easy to imagine what was happening. I like all the unique character names, too (: The dialogue was simple, but fitting for the characters. Overall, good job (:

thank you mad as the hatter. we are trying to find a way to lessen the confusion, but i'm glad it's a bit confusing and not too much :)

the layout it's nice and doesn't distract from the story
the title interesting, reminded me of my former obsession with animal stories :)
the story a little confusing to me, probably because I've never heard of the anime, but it's interesting. I'll probably check out the anime. It's nicely written, with few mistakes :)

horrors and demons i appreciate your comment alot. really helps. thanks about the wolves to ;D they are the cutest.

miss i'm fine we tried to make it as clear as possible. thank you the comment on our layout :D yes, we're having some difficulties on the characters because they're are so many but we're trying our best to keep it simple and make sure everyone undestands.

Nice layout!

You have so many characters D: sometimes that can be extremely hard to manage, you know. So far, you've done it quite well. Good job!

It was a bit confusing for me though. I had to read it a few times.

I don't lie haha, but the writing is really good & the wolves are so adorable!

thank you for the honest opinion. i was sort of thinking about the layout, and maybe i will consider it. C:

Crimson because of all the blood
It's a really small thing but I think it would be a bit better if you wrote, It was crimson because..
that's all other than that you have a lot of great description, the layout's really nice but I don't think it goes with the story. The banner blends in perfectly but it's the flower theme that makes it seem soft when the story itself is a bit gruesome with talk about killing deers, and the like.
It's really nice.

thank you so much :D aha, you guys are awesome. we try to proofread and find mistakes in our stories, if you find something that we didn't catch please tell us. thank you!

Okay, the layout is totally adorable! I loved it as soon as I looked at it! And I was right earlier when I tbought I'd like the story, because I do!

It's really good and well written. Saw a coupld of typos, but they're pretty common ones. But yeah, really, really like this! Love the idea and I can't wait to see more!

thank you! i love the help you guys are giving. i'll make a character page for all the wolves, but i'll leave the pics up there because kookiezz and i need to go back to them to find out which wolf is on what pack. but i'll tell you a little about each wolf starting from the next chapter. look out for the character page!

Blade is hot!

Sorry, I have a thing for wolves. Not werewolves either. ;) Anyway, I was totally expecting a cliche vampire vs. werewolves thing but I was quickly proved wrong. I would like to say that you happen to be a good writer. The paragraphs needs a little bit of spacing but after that it'll be great.

You don't lack description which is key. And the layout is amazing. I love making layouts. I like this one. I also like all the characters in the summary. But, what might make it easier is if you make character pages. That way you can tell us a little bit about them and all. I'm gonna sub to this. Good job. :"D

thank you for the comment hun. i fixed the content that was on the side ha ha, appreciate the comment.

Adorable layout, I really like it but I'm not fond of the content aligned at the very side, it'll be so much easier to read if it were in the middle. A shiver ran down my spine when I read the summary and I clicked on the first chapter, in anticipation to see what will happen :D Your paragraphs are very chunky in the first chapter, you can try breaking them up a bit. But overall it's very good so far and I wonder how they're going to get to the city :3 You guys have great potential and quite a similar writing style, keep it up :3