Skinny Love - Comments

I absolutely loved this, just to start off!

First, the layout was adorable and that poem drew me in. I liked it before I'd even gotten to the first chapter. The first chapter was great. The whole thing made him seem so perfect. The only thing that I was iffy about was it didn't really explain how she found him. I mean, she used the internet, but according to the story she didn't know anything other than what he looked like. But other than that it was great! The fact that it was based off a true story made it even better. The second chapter was just as good, if not better. I loved how he told her he would stay and that quote at the end was wonderful, especially since that was real too.

Okay, I felt like commenting before I started judging and all of that.

First off, oh my goodness gracious, that was amazing and adorable and, and I loved it!! I love your layout, it's gorgeous.

The first chapter - Thank you for adding that it was a true story, first and foremost. I wouldn't have noticed if I weren't told. It was beautifully written and I loved your descriptions and thoughts. It didn't seem nearly as short as it was. Even as I read it I knew that this was the kind of thing I was looking for, especially when you described what he did - great job!

Second chapter - Oh gosh, it seemed so real! The situations were so believable, as was the conflict with their relationship. I kept thinking "No, it has to work out!!" The difference in their ages didn't seem like as much of a barrier as it should have been. Again, well written and well thought out.

Your grammar is absolutely fine, aside from I think one mistake in the first chapter.

I honestly wish this could have been longer, but I don't think it could have been told more brilliantly. Amazing job and, even though I will be judging this story, as well as the other contest entries, I wish you the very best of luck. May the best writer win, you might say.

Alrighty then! First of all, the layout is so, so cute. Second, I love the little poem/summary that you have there. Just judging from the preliminary things, I can tell that I'm going to love this and I didn't even start reading yet! Anyways, moving on~

Chapter 1: Aww, this is such a lovely start to a lovely story. I love how this other person makes the main character feel and how the first paragraph is dedicated to describing how they make them feel. So adorable <3 Your descriptions here are so dream-like, like everything is so perfect; and even how you describe these two people as very, very different - the main character as insecure and the other boy as perfect - but the same, somehow. My only con/crit, however, is that some of the spacing is a bit wonky. It wasn't too distracting, though; just wanted to make you aware. Oh, and I also love that this first part is true. All in all, I love this so much. <3

Chapter 2: Omggggg, this is so illegally adorable. The way their relationship is played out is just so lovely. I won't lie, though; I totally thought that he was going to break up with her when she told him her real feelings. I was like, nooooo, not cool! D: But I'm glad that they got to see each other again! Anyways, I was totally shocked to find out that he wasn't her age, but the way you wrote this made it seem... not wrong, in a sense. I love how this ended, as there may be hope for those two after all. Even though this wasn't real, it seemed like it was. It's absolutely beautiful! <3

Okay, so I love this. It's a shame that it's so short, but you pulled it off amazingly. I wish you the best of the luck with this contest and I hope you win. You deserve it. Amazing job! <3333

It's really original and I liked the second chapter better than the first. Although they were both equal in great writing.

(My finger slipped & pressed submit oops)

Although the second part wasn't real, it seemed it. The quote made it feel even more real. Why are you so amazing Rowenbby. Jesus.

Bby this was so, so good. The use of the quote was a really good idea,

Wow. It is really beautiful, that you went through this. The second part, althought made up, is just as likely to happen. I love the ending. Especially how you quoted him from one of the messages he sent you<3 Beautiful. So glad I've been talking to you and read this. magnificant<3

This is adorable! You're a great writer and I can't wait for more. :D

That was so cute<3 And I think it's amazing that it really happened, especially that he is still a big part of your life(: I loved it.