July 14th, 2008 at 06:44pm
For Story/Review Game
Gawd...uh...
First, I love how you put poetry in this. And I love how you turned the poetry into conversation. Brendon's poetry was just...you know how sometimes inside your head you speak in poetry, when no one's listening? it was like that, except everyone was listening.
And I like your casual nod at the heartwrenching emolicious garbage getting all the accolades. =P... what else...It was sad. it made me sad. and i liked one line "It was Brendon he loved now, and maybe until he died". That was a good line. There's no other adjective.
You make their relationship interesting. Awkard but not too much so. And the thing of "i don't love you, but i don't hate you either". I especially like the way you brought the background of the story and the relationship out through Brendon and Ryan's poetry.
I give you an A+. :con:
Gawd...uh...
First, I love how you put poetry in this. And I love how you turned the poetry into conversation. Brendon's poetry was just...you know how sometimes inside your head you speak in poetry, when no one's listening? it was like that, except everyone was listening.
And I like your casual nod at the heartwrenching emolicious garbage getting all the accolades. =P... what else...It was sad. it made me sad. and i liked one line "It was Brendon he loved now, and maybe until he died". That was a good line. There's no other adjective.
You make their relationship interesting. Awkard but not too much so. And the thing of "i don't love you, but i don't hate you either". I especially like the way you brought the background of the story and the relationship out through Brendon and Ryan's poetry.
I give you an A+. :con: