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  • Killjoy_Juniper

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    Plot could have been stretched out more but b/c of the fact that it was for a short story competition type writing style I understand thr rushing and getting straight down to the point. It was well written and I do believe the plot was well developed and well written.
    June 11th, 2012 at 11:16pm
  • Shocking_Instability

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    ... I'm sorry*
    June 11th, 2012 at 10:15pm
  • Shocking_Instability

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    To be honest, I'm not a huge fan. I like the plot a lot. But I'm confused, why would Doreen pause? If she was really a contract killer, I don't think she would not shoot just because someone said wait. That's personally my own opinion. I'm not sure I like the ending either, it kind of seemed really rushed... I'm so
    June 11th, 2012 at 10:14pm
  • vivalasjenna

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    i like it (: personally, i love original stories better than fan fics. This is outstanding and i love the story line. can't wait for more (there is more, isn't there?) (:
    November 6th, 2011 at 05:01am
  • x3peacelovewarx3

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    Pretty Background.. :D

    I Liked it... Though I'm a little confused... She just didn't kill her just like that? I believe you could've explained your plot more. But other than that. I liked it :D
    November 6th, 2011 at 01:58am
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