This was actually pretty interesting. I didn't understand it at first, but as I read on I thouught it was pretty cool. Are you going to keep going with this?
Also, the story divider on the first chapter doesn't fit with the colour of the story content box. You could change the colour of the content box, because it would probably fit better. And you should center the story divider by placing
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where the story divider is in the chapter edit. ^.^
Also, the story divider on the first chapter doesn't fit with the colour of the story content box. You could change the colour of the content box, because it would probably fit better. And you should center the story divider by placing
But I loved this! Great job.