August 6th, 2013 at 03:27am
So, I came across your story in your signature. Of course it captured my attention. So far LOVE the plot.
Although I do think you need to work on your layout. It's kind of annoying, with it being so spread out. Slim it down a little. Also In your first chapter, the first paragraph had a lot of the word "bloomers". You might want to change that up. Because I swear I read it like 3-4 times.
Your story reminds me of this Episode of Black Butler where this girl gets abducted and turned into a marionette doll. :) That might be why I like this story so much. You have a lot of potential. And If you tell me what all you want I'll be more than happy to make you a banner. That looks amazing. :) Im pretty decent at banners. Check out my blog if you wanna see some of the ones ive made. :)
And I feel like the colour of the dress is an eerie foreshadowing of what's to come. I can't wait to see where this goes, it's just creepy enough to keep me enticed.
Also, I love the butterscotch lozenge addition, just cause I love butterscotch. (: