The Witch - Comments

First off I love the layout.

The summary was kind of long but it still drew me in, which is good.

This is very different and I love that, I love reading stories that are different and not the same. Your detials is very good, I could picture this in my mind, its hard to do but you did it. I love the characters, you made them seem real. Even though this is the first chapter, I really like this :)

This thought alone filled him with so much sadness and dread that he almost fell out of the tree from the sinking weight of it. The feeling dropped like a boulder from the sky to the very pit of his stomach, and settled, like gravel.

THAT was like my favorite part in the chapter! I love the story layout, but I hate how the first image is like...in half,you know? Is that tree house from the story?

Anyways, I love how you describe the characters and it was funny reading their conversation for some reason :3 I really like your story and it is very interesting. Especially what happened with his mom and her dad ^.^

This is really good(: The layout is really nice, but I don't like how the picture repeats, but that's probably just me.
This is written very well, with a lot of detail and emotion. You described the characters nicely. I like how you made them seem, it's interesting. I really want to know what happened with Dayton's mom and her dad, it really held my attention.
I hope this isn't like, harsh or anything.
Bye!

This is really good. I can't wait for more. I sooooo want to know about this craft!!!! This is really good because it intrigues me and pushes me to read further.

Thanks! Haha, I thought it was a little crappy and I think it needs a bit more work but I was excited to put something up. I'm happy you're curious! That's a good sign, right? I will definitely keep writing, and, again, thank you so so much for actually reading this haha. <3

You wrote this very wonderfully. The characters had depth and I love the way you explained things. :) I wonder why we won't be seeing her again...? And what is the craft? I'm so very curious. xD You keep writing, because this is very well done, and has definite potential.

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