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  • Yuurei.

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    Before I start crying at the genius of this story, I do want to know two things:
    How old is James?
    Annnd.. what is it that Quincy has?
    They're just curious questions. I still absolutely adore this.

    I'll just go cry now.
    October 19th, 2011 at 09:44am
  • Tongue Tied Ideas.

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    Perfect.

    You have killed me but resonated me back to life. How could you do such bittersweet things is beyond me, I am incapable of saying coherent thoughts but this I'll say, you have captured my heart, I am undoubtedly enamoured by your power with words and the swaying play at emotions I didn't know I was capable of having.

    Brilliant, unquestionably so.
    October 18th, 2011 at 10:41pm
  • CarryOnWanderer

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    :D I thought the second chapter was amazing, contrary to you're opinion of it :) I liked how you wrote this story realistically- with the older guy getting put in jail for being a 'sexual predator' and the whole shebang. Something you told me once always bugged you cause people tend to let their inner romantics fluff over the reality. But not you ^.^ The ending was a bit short but I think anything more might've… taken away from the beauty of their reunion. I'm sad that Quincy is dying, but I love how he went from child who learned of love too soon, to having it ripped away only because of what society has taught us as wrong and right, and finally go into a metamorphosis of one who doesn't want to hurt the one he loves by revealing the truth of the severity of his illness. The quotes were good ones too (you always seem to have ones that use so little words but speak volumes all the same x3 ).

    Good luck in the contest! >:]
    October 18th, 2011 at 05:46am
  • Nytestalker

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    PERFECTPERFECTPERFECT.
    The only word to describe this ending.
    I'm seriously glad that this worked out the way it did.
    Now I don't have to disown you <3
    October 15th, 2011 at 11:42pm
  • Nytestalker

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    QUINCY BETTER NOT DIE OR I'LL NEVER FORGIVE YOU. EVER.
    Happy ending! Happy ending!
    I really like the idea of the letters and that pies was so sweet.
    I swear they better be able to see each other again. >.<
    October 15th, 2011 at 11:07pm
  • coralreefs;

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    confusion. i like this so far, but i was just wondering...
    is Quincy a guy?
    October 10th, 2011 at 04:36am
  • EyeScreamWonderland

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    :P I love it!
    October 9th, 2011 at 08:30pm
  • Nytestalker

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    I have so many questions. So. Many. Questions.
    I'll do my best to reign them in.
    1) If Quincy is 12, how old is James?
    2) How do they know each other if the age gap is THAT significant?
    3) Why the hell is Quincy in a wheelchair?
    4) Why did James just leave him?? That's some bullshit.

    I look forward to getting some answers love ;)
    October 9th, 2011 at 12:01am
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