Ghost whisperer - Comments

PS. I found it funny that her slang totally sounds British lol

I like how your chapters are short, they're simple (if not always sweet) and leave me wanting more (:
But in chapter 4 you kind of threw me off when you randomly slipped into third person. I read it again a couple of times to make sure that it was not a ghost she was referring to. To be honest, I normally don't like these type of stories... but I found myself loving it (: it reminds me of that book "Make Lemonade" by Virginia Wolfe. I read it when I was younger; your story just brought back some extraordinary memories. Thanks (: and sorry if this is more touchy-feely than help!

That's fine, enjoy school and thank you for the lovely comment xxxx

I like the layout ;D

To be honest, I love how you finished it, but it seemed rushed,ya know? A bit of detail here and there and you'll be fine. The summary makes people wanna read it, ya know? I'm sorry this is so short, I have school :/

Thank you xx

I liked how she helps people.

Thank you thunder :). Xxxxxx

I must say, I really love the lay out. The background is really nice. :) The picture says a lot and the summary doesn’t give anything away.

So far, this has that journal entry kinda feel, you know like a diary. Despite its shortness, it makes me wonder what’s going to happen next. Just one thing though, I would space out the paragraphs a bit more and add some details to the chapters because it’s hard to follow what’s going on. I hope you all don’t take this the wrong way, but some of these chapters could be placed together, but I love where this story is going though. :)

Yeah that gets better over the course of the story xxx

So I read the first two chapters and it sounds like a pretty good story line. It sounds a little rushed to be honest though. It could just be how short the chapters are. Adding a bit more description to both of your stories could help you out very much. (:

Aw thanks tele :D xxxx

Thx
most of the spelling errors are me lol sorry
yeah chapter 5 was good

I love it. It's like a movie in my head and all the characters have such a strong voice. I have to read it in an english accent xD I love the layout first. Second chapter 5 was so touching for me, because I relate to it a lot. I read up to 19 and I will keep reading on! I find this very interesting and I like reading Charlotte's diary entries. I barely payed attention to the spelling errors it was just that good of a story:)
I have nothing negative to say.

aww thx xx ;)

You do fine love :D xxx

Lol i'm just helping and I have awful grammar so sorry about that I will try to get better x

Thank you :D
yes there will be more about benjamin in future chapters :D

xxxx

I am genuinely interested by this story. I've only read as far as Chapter Nine, but I will continue to read the others. Charlotte's mother sounds like a complete a-hole, forgive my language but that woman needs to remove whatever stick is stuck up her behind.

I'm also interested in Benjamin. I'd love to know some more of his background history. Perhaps a spin off story? Who he is, what is this bracelet, what's his story?

You've got some grammar mistakes and confusion with present tenses, nothing a quick read over wont fix. All in all, I like what I've read.

R u talking to Dead not Sleeping I will tell her for u

Can I make you a layout? I have the perfect idea, if you want ^.^
I like the one you have though ^.^

I haven't read this story, but I'm gonna AFTER I comment and you say hi to your baby for me ^.^