What Part of Forever - Comments

yay!!! wonderful ending i think =] can't wait for the sequal

So I haven't gotten round to reading this quite yet because I have like a gajillion stories on a waitlist of sorts and not enough time to read them all, but I was just wondering where you got the totally awesome picture that is the background??

oh no end of tour is coming up...cant wait to know what exactly is gonna happen with all that. but i'm glad Skye and Oliver accept his relationship with gerard now =]

I really love your story and cannot wait to see what happens next weather Jared is homophobic or not where Jace and Gerard's relationship goes next over all a kick ass story keep them coming :-D

I'm still reading...meow

The drawings were so cute! I really liked that chapter; thanks for telling me that you had updated. I'm so happy for this story.

I'm still reading! Well, more like I forgot about it for a long time but then I found it again. I like your style of how events go. The commenter above me said that you should they're like little diary entries, but I like how the chapters differ from one another like that.

Okay so I'm going to give you some constructive criticism here. please don't take any of it too seriously, I would just like to help you improve your story.

First of all your layout is really awesome, but I have a problem reading the words, they sort of blend in with the background color and it is hard on the eyes. I suggest maybe using more if a contrasting color for the font.

Second, your story has a good plot going with it and all, but I feel like it is missing something. Your paragraphs seem very detached from each other, almost as if they are short little diary entries. Make it more like a playing out of events. Describe actions and settings. It seems as though it is mostly dialogue too. Though it isn't. The whole thing is just sort of fast paced and rushed. Don't be afraid to elaborate on an event. Maybe that's just your style though.

Third, you introduced the band members but I noticed you skipped Evan, just saying.

That's all really. Your story has a good thing going for it. Just little things will make it top of my list. ^-^ can't wait for more.

First I gotta say
I love your title and Layout

Now with your story,
Not a huge fan of MCR but I'm still a fan of them.
If you get what I mean.

I think you should really continue this
I can't wait to see what else happens.
I love how you wrote this
Very nicely done

I can't wait to see more
Keep up the good work
<3

you definately need to continue this story im eager to see how it turns out