Uprooted - Comments

This is interesting! I really like the names and how unique they are. However, I think the yellow background for the text makes it a bit difficult to read. That just could be me, though. Also, I think this story would improve if the updates were a bit longer and included a bit more information!

I do like how you begin each character with a sort of prologue to introduce them. I must say, though, a little more detail would be nice. There is a lot you can do with all your characters. Just take the time to get into their minds and in the scene and let the emotions and descriptive words of what is happening take over.

I think I will read the chapters after the first four to see if I can get any more out of this. Keep writing :)

Um first I have to say not a big fan of the plot since I didn't fully get what it is suppose to be about.
Yet, the context is okay, a bit too short, but okay. Like Brooke said, you may want a beta to help you out.

This is sort of neat, but then again, there's something about the names and all the random big words you're throwing in that just takes away from the story. Also, a couple times you have sentences way too short, where they could be combined. I suggest getting a beta in the forums to look over this? Because I think the whole idea from like, riches to rags is cool. You could definitely do something with this, if you just put your mind to it and fix up your errors.