You Do Care - Comments

i really enjoyed this. the only thing bad thing i have to say is that the text was so small i had to enlarge my browser to read it, heh!

it had this wonderfully eerie feel, haunting almost. and the little flashes into their relationship choked me up a little bit. my favourite line was 'My head isn’t big enough for all the things inside it', it just jumped out at me and i love it.

I really like it. It was different. I though it was going to be just like everyother break up story when the guy or girl cant stand that they broke up with their partner. But this is so much different. I also like the layout. It fits the story.
Last I could say is keep writing and never let anybody ever tell you different.

I really like the layout, but the words are so small. I was like, "Noo!" but oh well what can I do? Anyway, at first I thought this was going to be like a break up scene maybe. Or like a hurt/comfort type of deal, then I kept reading and I was like "Whoa. This is awesome."

I loved the way you described the death and the fact that the memories were playing like a scratched DVD. That was really good imagery. I giggled like a little girl when I read the gummy rings part. That added a very emotional support to the main character. I felt connected to him at that point.

I don’t think I’m able care - able to care, is that what you meant?

I liked the man who was there to comfort the Finn. It was really nice of him. I liked that he said everyone else was falling apart too. Or did I get that wrong?

This was a really, really good written piece of work. I enjoyed it very much.

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This is absolutely one of the best things I have read in a while. I loved it. I loved the way you worded it, the concept, they way you used the quote. (And yes, the quote is from Harry Potter :3)

Isn't that quote from Harry Potter? Anywho, this was absolutely fabulous. I could really see how this guy was hurting and the other person was worried. I always think the same when people commit suicide that, even if it doesn't concern me, don't they realise the pain their causing everyone they left behind? But anyway... The vocabulary and sentence structure and what have you were very good. This was just really brilliant :)