To Kill a Ghost - Comments

This is so interesting, wow. And you're a great writer. Update soon?

I love ghost stories. And this is no exception. I love the title also, mainly because it reminds me of 'To Kill a Mockingbird', a favourite novel of mine.
And I've always been intrigued by Ouija boards. I think of them as evil voodoo witch magic summoning things but never something as simplistic as trying to summon a loved one.
You write this splendidly and you have me intrigued for the next chapter. Well done.

I've never read a ghost story so I decided to check yours out. I like that the layout is simple and easy to read. Those are always my favorite. I noticed in the first chapter that in the sentence: as her body drifted with through the cold darkness - with through is not in the right wording. Or am I just reading it wrong? I don't understand it, did you mean it to be one or the other?

Also you've forgotten a period, to take care of her So why didn't they help her?, between her and So. The quotation in the last line of the first chapter is going the wrong way.

nearly chocking on - Did you mean choking?

shook just enough force - with just enough force, would sound much better.

made it’s way across - its.

I don't think this is written weirdly at all. Though, if I wouldn't have clicked on the Character Page I may have been a little lost as to who and what Maggie was.

that he mother hadn’t - her mother?

This is really interesting. I can't wait to see what kind of relationship happens between Maggie and River.

Okay. Ouji boards are fookin' bad spirit MAGNETS.

Oooo, her Ma huh? My Ma's dead too, but I just think, "Hey, if she doesn't want to talk to me, fine! But biotch is gonna get it when I finally die and see her in heaven." you know, it may be just me.

PLEASE WRITE MORE.

Agh. I'm so interested. I want to be able to turn the page and keep reading.. But I can't. D:
This sounds fantastic. I love the writing style. You caught me - hook, line, and sinker!

BREAKING COMMENT HYMEN AND TAKING THY COMMENTS VIRGINITY.

AND YOUR SUBSCRIPTIONS HYMEN TOO.

I adore this, too much, the layout is simple, eery, and very easy to read. So two thumb uppp! The story also seems to be very promising. Maybe its just me because I ADORE ghost stories, and this is one haha. I like the way you write, by the way.

It's a but choppy, distant, a lot like the way a ghost might think, of course, we dont know haha. But it's very realistic for a story. PLEASE Update soon, not just for my inner critic but my nerdy reader side too