Reckless Nostalgia - Comments

It's not too bad, there's definitely potential. Some grammar issues, but I think they've been pointed out already. I only read the first chapter, but it didn't exactly draw me in too much, though it was fairly interesting. Maybe if you added more descriptions or worked in a little bit of a back story, it would catch the reader's attention more. I think heartbreak and such is stuff a lot of people can relate to as well, so if you gave it more feeling and emotion it would grab people more. Your writing itself is pretty good though, keep it up! Practice makes perfect, right? (:

Your descriptions are a little lacking and bland in places, and it'd be nice if you developed Reese some more, as she seems a little two-dimensional. I've also noticed that you often miss commas at the end of dialouge. I think if you'd add more detail and described how characters look like, and such.

I'm noticing that you're missing a few spaces between paragraphs. They're single-spaced instead of double-spaced.

“Hey! You’re just in time! We just started another game. Come sit” she called You're missing a comma after Come sit to end your dialogue. I see this happening more than once.

“Uh, no. That’s okay. Has anyone seen Stephen though? I-I was just talking to him outside, but I don’t know where he went.” I rambled. The period after I don't know where he went should be a comma. I also see this mistake more than once, but it shouldn't be too hard to fix.

The first chapter didn't really draw me in. While there isn't exactly a "slow start", there isn't much excitement going on either. There isn't enough information about Reese for me to actually care about what is happening to her. I think this would be better off with a little more detail. Good luck.

This was really good. I wish I had known more of what happened with Stephen and Reese. I think Stephen is a real ass. I didn't see any grammatical errors and all in all, it was good! Keep writing <3

Well... i did just so happen to read ,this first chapter of "reckless nostalgia" and i just so happened to ABSOLUTELY love it!!! :D please. please please, continue with what you've started. i'm already anxious to find out what happens between Reese and Stephen! :D