A Simple White Rose - Comments

  • Enkay18

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    Lol, okay.
    May 4th, 2013 at 02:26am
  • Saruwatari

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    lol ty i'll edit later :P
    May 2nd, 2013 at 02:41am
  • Enkay18

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    In "Pansy"...
    3rd paragraph--Capitalize "Stupify" "Manners", not ""Manors" "infront" needs a space.
    4th--coughed, not caughed.
    "staring down at the table and noticed..." needs a comma after "table" and you could omit "a" right there. It's not necessary.
    That's it for this chapter.
    May 2nd, 2013 at 12:36am
  • kim wonshik.

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    This plot has potential (just like the other story I commented upon) and it's really got my attention. I really suggest proofreading and using an online spell check as it'll really help your writing, but overall this is really good. I hope you'll keep up the great work. :)
    February 22nd, 2013 at 06:08am
  • Enkay18

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    Broke up with Jason after a month, started dating Jack. Gary likes me again, along with a couple others. Had a wonderful Valentine's Day. Hope to hear from you soon. Ich liebe dich! <3
    February 15th, 2013 at 04:40pm
  • Enkay18

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    Nm. Broke up with Christian, started going out with Jason, found out that a couple other guys like me...Wbu?
    November 23rd, 2012 at 08:48am
  • Saruwatari

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    LOL okay. I'll fix those :P What's up girly girl??
    November 17th, 2012 at 12:15am
  • Enkay18

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    Lol, I guess I could say hi, after all this time. So, what's up?
    November 11th, 2012 at 04:21am
  • Enkay18

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    These are all for Chapter 11, btw.
    November 11th, 2012 at 04:21am
  • Enkay18

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    Manners. You typed "in front" as one word. "Coughed" not "Caughed". 7th paragraph, you need a comma for "I mean, you are..." 11th paragraph, "staring at the table, and noticed..." needs a comma.
    November 11th, 2012 at 04:20am
  • Saruwatari

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    Yeah me 2(: lol and ty Schwester :D
    October 16th, 2011 at 07:18pm
  • TeenaLyon

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    Haha...nice way tell the secret!
    I kinda think blaise shuld die btw(:
    October 16th, 2011 at 06:44pm
  • TeenaLyon

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    Keep writing lol
    Luv u!(:
    October 13th, 2011 at 04:29am
  • Saruwatari

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    Cookie for the first comment :D :D :D
    Okay, not really, but hey(: I tried..... :D
    October 2nd, 2011 at 05:40am