I like this so far! I think it definitely has potential. I love the name Callie, too. :) As for suggestions about the intro, it has nothing to do with actual content (love the line where Puck says, 'Whatever helps you sleep at night, by the way), but it might be easier to read if you put spaces in between the paragraphs, since there's no indentation on Mibba. You don't have to, of course. Just an option. :D I'm subscribing and can't wait for you to write more!
October 4th, 2011 at 10:44pm