Two pieces of constructive criticism for you would be, pro-long your chapters. I understand you're not trying to give to much away but I'm at chapter four and still know hardly anything about the characters, their lives, their settings. Also, I feel the chapters are slightly lacking a sense of surroundings. You seem to be more focused on describing the characters movements but you also need to be able to give the reader an image in their head of what's going on in the story.
February 19th, 2012 at 11:40pm