This is pretty cool. I like the idea of the fantasy academy where the extraordinary is normal. I tend to like that kind of stuff anyway, but the fact that all of these strange people come together to act fantastic and it's normal for them is a neat idea.
"I screamed and pressed my back against Sara's and struck a pose and listened to the the other girls scream and run after him." This sentence has a little too much action as do many of your sentences in this story. I believe that you could improve your story some by making some of your sentences into two instead of one.
I like this idea and I really think you should keep writing! I like what you have so far.
"I screamed and pressed my back against Sara's and struck a pose and listened to the the other girls scream and run after him." This sentence has a little too much action as do many of your sentences in this story. I believe that you could improve your story some by making some of your sentences into two instead of one.
I like this idea and I really think you should keep writing! I like what you have so far.