your storyline must be good, two heads are better then one. but some or the descripitions, in all chapters, are plain and thing. their is little distant detail. Here is what I do when getting the scenery ready for my characters entrance. I describe it from a distance, then I describe it up-close, and last but not least I describe it from my characters POV. So if I am describing snowing mountains from a distance this is how I would do it.
Pale blue shark teeth bite the distant horizon. The crowd of mountains that gather together not far from my village are blocking the new morning sun as usual. But without the mountains there would be no stream passing through the village. From the village the mountains look calm and beautiful, something you’d only see once in your lifetime, but from where I stand I don’t have much life left. The mountain shrieks and blows at us with such incredible force. My beard is sprinkled with snow flakes and frozen spit that uncontrollably dribbles from my lips. I wish I’d never thought of climbing to the top of the mountain.
i hoped i helped the two of you and can't wait until youse finish it!
Pale blue shark teeth bite the distant horizon. The crowd of mountains that gather together not far from my village are blocking the new morning sun as usual. But without the mountains there would be no stream passing through the village. From the village the mountains look calm and beautiful, something you’d only see once in your lifetime, but from where I stand I don’t have much life left. The mountain shrieks and blows at us with such incredible force. My beard is sprinkled with snow flakes and frozen spit that uncontrollably dribbles from my lips. I wish I’d never thought of climbing to the top of the mountain.
i hoped i helped the two of you and can't wait until youse finish it!