I thought that this was a really cute story. And, of course, I'm always in favor of sex scenes :P The only thing that I'd recommend for you to work on would be spelling/grammar and writing with more color and details. I really liked your story line and I liked how you followed the song "Thick and Thin", even interpreting and adding on your own ideas. Good luck with the contest :)
November 27th, 2011 at 10:53pm