Bones - Comments

Finally getting around to judging this contest, I apologize for the delay. :s

First, I loved the layout. It was really simple and it matched just wonderfully with the picture.
Second, this was a great piece. You portrayed the disorder very well and I could feel the emotion, it made me sympathize with the character and hope he got better which was amazing with the amount of words.
Third, you have a great way with words. The way you used the word 'beautiful' so many times but I didn't get bored of it or anything like that, it seemed to fit right in so that was wonderful.

I really enjoyed this piece, it was great. Good job.<3

I really enjoyed this. It's not very often you come across stories that include boys with eating disorders, but this was a nice change. I liked how both of them were suffering and how she was attempting to help him, I know a lot of people with eating disorders that strive to help others when they can't help themselves, so it was very realistic and I could imagine them curled up underneath a blanket together. The way the banner matches the title is a nice way to show the content of the story, without actually giving anything away.

I really liked how she seemed to be proud of him, too and how she wanted him to recover. I thought it was a really sweet way to end such a powerful, heart wrenching piece.

This is a great piece; I didn’t expect this to be about a male with an eating disorder, so despite the topic it was an interesting read.

Your first line was really powerful, and gave the drabble the option to stray off in so many different directions. Your dialogue felt really natural, as did your descriptions of the movements. You’ve kept your words delicate and pretty, but gave them enough supremacy to pull on the readers emotions. We all know someone (or have been there ourselves) who had problems with eating disorders and self-image but this piece should give everyone a tiny bit of hope. The admiration between the two characters is clear, and this is a stunning piece.

The last line is so powerful. Good job.

Short, but beautiful. This was heart-wrenching and wonderful. Lovely, lovely job.