Don't Walk Away - Comments

Comment swap brought me here! I enjoyed your story (I won't lie, I love smuts, haha). I found there were a few grammatical errors, usually just a word left out or an 'and' instead of 'an' kind of thing. Not in any way a big deal, but just a bit of a nitpick thing of mine. Good start and keep it up :)

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I normally don't like too much smut but this was really good! Your characters are well written. Everything tied in really nicely. I didn't see any grammar or spelling mistakes. I really liked the name Starr. Anyway good luck!

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Wow, this is definitely something I don't normally read. However, it's a good story. It's well-written and somebody who likes to read this sort of thing would love it. Hayden and Starr are characters who are well-written and I like their witty dialogue. Good luck with this story!

Really nice job.

Interesting. Not something I would read but it's descriptive. Good Job. :)

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Well it was good haha. I don't usually read that kind of thing and like the person below me at first I thought they were eight LOL.. I was like umm when I was eight I thought boys had cooties... it was pretty good.. no grammatical or spelling errors that I could see. I like the idea of friends with benifts.
Keep on writing(:

this is really goo, please update soon:)

I mistook the age of the couple at the beginning. O.O I thought it was seven to eight years olds instead I seven to eighteen year olds. >_< I love the chapter. It was really sweet and hot. :D can't wait for the next one.

I'm really not a fan of straight up romance/smut, but I"m here for comment swap so we'll see how this goes. :)

"At the reception areas were tenants complaining or asking, or possibly new tenants." That line just feels a little off... asking about what? What are the new tenants doing there, but seriously, just what are they asking about? It just feels like a thought trailed off.

You jump from first person to third in "Once the doors opened on floor six, I stepped through and made her way through room number six-thirty-four." I think you can just type out the number in this case since it's so large instead of spelling it out.

There's also a tense jump right here "...Seemed very delicious right now." Right now implies it's going on as you write, but everything else seems to be in the past tense.

You put a question mark at the end of "I know how much you like my arms wrapped around you?" You need a period there instead!

The rest of this was well written, although it isn't my preferred type of reading. Best of luck with it!

First off I want to say....WOW. Haha I love a good sexy book, and I got that here with yours! There are some gramatical errors here and there that can be easily fixed. Overall I really enjoyed your first two chapters, I deffinately look forward to reading more!

Wow. I recieved this on comment swap and let's just say it was a little unexpected (but not in a bad way). This isn't what I usually read but you've written it so well. I love how you draw in the reader from the summary. Very effective way of making people read on!

Really great start. I really look forward to reading more and connecting more with the characters. Subscribed

It's really sweet.
D'aww Hayden sounded jealous for a second ;D
I can't wait for the next one.
Looks like its going to be an awesome story like I Kissed.

I love love love love !!!
Awesome start :D
And I liked the scene ;)