Eight, Mate - Comments

This was beautiful. Let me say that first. It was so emotional, such an
roller coaster. I felt like I was on this whole journey with her.

Summary; you have a gift for emotions. I wanted to cry with who I assume is your main character. It didn't quite captivate me, but it did hold my interest very well.

The chapter itself was fantastic. I could feel everything she went through. It made me want to cry quite a few times. Despite the way it ended, I still feel like it concluded. I love the last line. It just makes sense and it broke my heart. Poor girl.

The torment is so real. I wish people were more accepting. :/

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I'm sorry that it took so long. The first couple of stories that I clicked on were really short, and I wanted to give you a full comment's worth of feedback.

This story really strikes a personal note with me. I am straight, but I have a very close friend who is gay and who's family refuses to accept him. It really is heartbreaking to watch the emotional toll that something like that can have on a person. I'm a firm believer in the idea that love is a universal emotion, and anyone can feel love for anyone. I am behind gay marriage, 100%.

Something that intrigues me about this story is the close relationship that Lisa seems to have with Mitch. It is a strange relationship, though. It seems to me that if they got along so well he would have an easier time with accepting her sexuality. Especially considering that they're both adults. I understand his frustration with her, but it would be nice if he could be a little bit more accepting of Karen.

"I want to go to New York City." I smiled. It was the one thing I knew I wanted. I didn't know what I wanted to be when I "grew up," or what kind of life I should have, but I knew I wanted those bright lights. They would either welcome me or chew me up and spit me out, but either way they would change my life, and change was what I needed more than anything.

This is my favorite paragraph in the entire story. Probably because I feel the exact same way that she does, except that my city of choice is Chicago. I use Chicago in my stories quite often because I can't get enough of it. She might be a dreamer, but dreaming never hurt anyone in my opinion.

I can't believe the Mitch flew off the handle like that. Told her that she was pretending. That's the worst thing you can say to someone who trusts you when they decide to share personal information. The person that I feel the worst for is Karen, because I can only imagine how it would feel to be the one hidden from everyone.

This was very, very well written. Very minimal grammatical mistakes, great imagery and character building, and believable chain of events. Kudos :)

Absolutely amazing.

It's very easy to relate to something like this – whether the reader is gay or straight because everyone goes through that situation where your friend is shitting on something that you are or believe in. It's not fun and definitely can be very hurtful.

The development on the characters' personalities were good. I liked how you had instant insight on how her brother would react from the start without giving away too much.

I also really like how the summary used part of the story. It gives you a glimpse of what's going to happen and what to expect.

Overall, really great story and I seriously like the idea of this. :) <3

I think this was really great :) I think probably most gay people go through this when they come out. The characters are well formed and I love Lisa. I Liked it and wished there was more of it <3