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Author [Danerys Targaryen]
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Grace Dunne
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Okay. Here's what I think.
I like the idea, really, I do. But. It was too... passive. I didn't make it past the first section. You're first chapter needs a little more emotion, a little more 'wow'. Something that will keep the reader asking questions. You know?
October 19th, 2011 at 02:34am
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I like the idea, really, I do. But. It was too... passive. I didn't make it past the first section. You're first chapter needs a little more emotion, a little more 'wow'. Something that will keep the reader asking questions. You know?