You Can Take All the Pain Away From Me - Comments

i like it, its interesting
ill subscribe :)

Nice update!
I like where this is going :]
I want a cookie!
Update when you can!
:]

luff the update!
<3

This story, was really good.
Your writing has inproved throughout the chapters.
Soon, it will come to you easy.
Anyway's.
-Subscribes-
Update when you can?

OMFG! I lovers it....lool sorry.

Heres the update all!

Rad story
:]
Chapter three was longer!
Yay! lol
:]Nice job

grandma eater.:

Good update, but you have MANY spelling errors.
I see above that you asked where? Let me point some out for you, : )
The phrases in Italic are what you wrote, in the bold is what it should be.

The bis was already moving and we were still hiding.
bus

I opened the door a little bit and peeked out side.
a little, and peeked outside.

"This is your cookies isn't it?"I said calmly.
"These are your cookies, aren't they?"

I will correct them when I have the time cause my sister is always asking if she could use the computer and thats why I don't have the time to check my
stuff and all.So when I have a lot of time I will correct it

good job though.

Hey!!!
okay so how about i love the update?
and how about you need to update soon?
lol

love ya babe!
Lyns,

Good update, but you have MANY spelling errors.
I see above that you asked where? Let me point some out for you, : )
The phrases in Italic are what you wrote, in the bold is what it should be.

The bis was already moving and we were still hiding.
bus

I opened the door a little bit and peeked out side.
a little, and peeked outside.

"This is your cookies isn't it?"I said calmly.
"These are your cookies, aren't they?"

and more, try using spell check. : )

good job though.

buzzymcr:

great:) you ahve grammatical errors though,,,:)

What grammatical errors?

great:) you ahve grammatical errors though,,,:)

Not bad ; )
Interesting enough to pick my curiosity.
I'm subscribing.

ps; if you have the time could you please read my story? (take me, I am the drug)

plzkthx. 8)