Deal with the Devil - Comments

  • shortygirl

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    Well breakfast could've gone worse...it could've been me cooking...then there wouldn't be a house anymore....he acting somewhat nice
    November 17th, 2011 at 02:33am
  • justhannah;

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    Hmm he's not slapping her around so I guess that's sort of an improvement . :S i feel so bad for her though. What is she gonna do if she screws up his breakfast? Maybe that girl who took their coats will help or another worker.
    Loved it!
    November 11th, 2011 at 03:17pm
  • Fictional.Reality

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    Shadows is definitely intimidating but he seems to be nice to her, expect for the whole chores things. What i am trying to say is that it could always be worse i guess.
    <3 Michele
    November 11th, 2011 at 04:47am
  • XtremeFairy

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    Amazing update :D
    November 11th, 2011 at 03:23am
  • Gurl

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    Oh man. Cooking sucks.
    November 11th, 2011 at 03:23am
  • shortygirl

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    Well at least he gave her clothes to wear...as for the cooking good luck with that
    November 11th, 2011 at 03:18am
  • Mercy.iz.Muzick

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    Wow I love your writing style. And the story itself is really good. Hope you get to feeling better, and one more thing, update soon?
    November 10th, 2011 at 01:43am
  • Nanner.

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    I like this because it could so easily be changed into an original story and is so not typically what you'd except out of a fanfiction. Maybe that's just the beauty of it. <33

    I HATE TYLER.
    A lot. What a p33n.
    AND I HATE MAFFEW.
    A lot. Also a p33n.

    Keep writing your heart out. :D Fantastic miss pilchnuh ~
    November 9th, 2011 at 04:36am
  • xuanny

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    updates:)
    November 9th, 2011 at 04:34am
  • XtremeFairy

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    amazing update :D
    November 7th, 2011 at 11:31pm
  • hmc09

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    Really good story! Defiantly subscribing!
    please update again asap!!! :)
    November 7th, 2011 at 01:59pm
  • avenging angel

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    O.O wow shadows is one scary character! I wonder what he'll have her do and so valen is basically his slave I hope it's worth Saving Tyler •.• please update soon!:)
    November 7th, 2011 at 06:37am
  • TwistedByTheStars

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    Subscribed! I love it can't wait for more!
    November 7th, 2011 at 06:31am
  • shortygirl

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    I can only imagine what Matt has in for her
    November 7th, 2011 at 05:24am
  • shortygirl

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    She's gonna rejret it
    November 7th, 2011 at 05:23am
  • justhannah;

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    What an evil bastard! Tyler shoulda just paid up. I wonder what was going through his mind as he watched her sign her life away...
    I love this so much. :) Can't wait till your next update!
    November 7th, 2011 at 03:51am
  • Fictional.Reality

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    Awesome update
    But Tyler is a dumb ass for not having the money and i feel like she's goign to be made into a sex slave
    <3 Michele
    November 7th, 2011 at 03:18am
  • MoMo_92

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    Love it!!!!!! Damn Valen u got urself in some deep shit how r u goin to get urself out of tht mess.....damn shame even tho this story is somewat bad but I think being Matt's slave forever can hav some perks I mean u get food, shelter, a warm bed hopefully??? Can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)
    November 7th, 2011 at 03:04am
  • eanderson129

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    Wow great update! I can't wait to see what's in store next.
    November 7th, 2011 at 03:02am
  • Nanner.

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    Seeing as I already read the first chapter but didn't comment, I will be more than happy to tell you in all capital letters that IT WAS BEYOND FAN TO THE TASTIC. I do quite enjoy a suspenseful ending as well. <3

    Chapter dos:

    DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMN. DAAAAAAAAAAAMN. DAAAAMN. I just. You just. But. I. DAAAAAAMN. I was so not expecting the "gang" to be Avenged Sevenfold. You kind of just completely took me off guard there. Love this idea. Love it, love it, love it.

    Another story where Matthew is a complete p33n. Go figure. ;D It also makes me hate her fiance. I mean, who asks someone to marry them then douches around and hides a whole bunch of shit.

    Absolutely adore this story. One of the best fanfiction ideas I've ever read.
    <33
    November 5th, 2011 at 06:51am