Hush Yael - Comments

I enjoy the idea of this, and that it's based on true events. I'm not too sure I like the layout; it's a bit difficult to read. Especially the text on the picture, I couldn't read that all. Other than that, I really like the story.

So, I only read chapter 2, as you requested in the contest, and I must say that was quite wonderful. I think that you wrote this really well, and your descriptions just seem to push forward the dark tone of this story.

I was easily drawn into the story as well. I'm not even sure what I want to say, because I really enjoyed reading this. I think you've got a great story idea here and you're doing such a great job writing it. I really have nothing bad to say about it. Wonderful writing!

It was suspenseful in the first chapter, but as I was continuing to read it, the suspense suddenly dropped a little.

Yael, I think of him as an ignorant man but proud as well. We all can't be satisfied can we? Even if we live in Heaven, we need to get our revenge.

And I was downright upset in the last chapter. It hurt me to know that he was going to Hell. But every act that we do has a result, whether it was a consequence or a reward. Like I said, I guess he just wasn't satisfied.

This was the first story that I read that I read that hadn't had romance. Surprisingly, I enjoyed reading this.

I'm glad to see this updated. I really enjoyed the updates.

I really like this. I just now found it.