Of course, I love Harry Potter so much, and this story gave me that sense of warmth and comfort that the series always gives me. I love, first of all, the word combinations you chose. They were sensibly and not over-staged, such as "watery smile" and "the waning of holding hands." They certainly aren't too dramatic, but they're language blends that others wouldn't just think up. They're unique to you, and your writing style, which had such a really nice blend of summary, backstory, and emotion in it.
I love how George's pain is true to the novels and important to the story, but you don't spend unnecessary time on it. The way you keep relating to the hurt he feels makes me so sad- I can see his emptiness, and even feel his personality slightly drained from it. And it's so nice, too, because it makes him more compassionate to Hermione, as her sorrows bring her closer to him. It's sad, but sweet. <3
Oh man, the way that you write is SO amazingly perfect in relation to people- human beings. You are so good with their qualities; in the simple ways they talk and think, and in the descriptions and verbs you use. "Bite," as a word for said made me feel crazy with love. <3 You write so simply, but in that "less is more way." You waste no time, and you're always making your reader react. I feel like I'm understanding your characters as people- they are alive, moving through my life, and I am observing them... Except I also have the gift of your amazing writing skills as I learn their stories. <3
Keep writing, love, I want to read more and more. c:
October 23rd, 2011 at 05:11am
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Of course, I love Harry Potter so much, and this story gave me that sense of warmth and comfort that the series always gives me. I love, first of all, the word combinations you chose. They were sensibly and not over-staged, such as "watery smile" and "the waning of holding hands." They certainly aren't too dramatic, but they're language blends that others wouldn't just think up. They're unique to you, and your writing style, which had such a really nice blend of summary, backstory, and emotion in it.
I love how George's pain is true to the novels and important to the story, but you don't spend unnecessary time on it. The way you keep relating to the hurt he feels makes me so sad- I can see his emptiness, and even feel his personality slightly drained from it. And it's so nice, too, because it makes him more compassionate to Hermione, as her sorrows bring her closer to him. It's sad, but sweet. <3
Oh man, the way that you write is SO amazingly perfect in relation to people- human beings. You are so good with their qualities; in the simple ways they talk and think, and in the descriptions and verbs you use. "Bite," as a word for said made me feel crazy with love. <3 You write so simply, but in that "less is more way." You waste no time, and you're always making your reader react. I feel like I'm understanding your characters as people- they are alive, moving through my life, and I am observing them... Except I also have the gift of your amazing writing skills as I learn their stories. <3
Keep writing, love, I want to read more and more. c: