March 21st, 2012 at 06:10pm
Okay, this story. I like it. The layout's really pretty! Plus you are giving the readers amazing detail. The plot is INCREDIBLY creative! It's like fight club for vampires! I just wish you'd get more in depth with the characters- their personalities, how they look, and more of Alexa's internal conflicts. Sean seems like a real sweetheart, if they are a couple, which I assume, I'd love to see more "aww-lovey-dovey" stuff. I'm a sucker for some sappy romance, haha. Lastly, I noticed a few spelling/grammar errors- for that I reccomend getting a beta. If you don't know what that is, it's a personal editor.
Other than that, I really like this story and hope you update soon! (:
Plus I'm subscribing, 'cause I love it so much. xD
Sooooo subscribed ;D