Klutz. - Comments

Thanks Reanna :) thanks for your criticism, I know it needs a lot of work! I love you! I'll be asking you for more advise at school tomorrow!

I think that like lil_angel666 put it just work on your dialogue spacing
Also with how to make your characters have a slightly more realistic feel. I like the story but I think that its very animated right now and It could take on a tone of real life stuff.
Its good so far, I just believe you can make it a trillion times better
^___^ there you go Cristina ;)

OH i see... Thanks so much :D i'll try to stop doing that.

Only prob right now seems to be that you start a sentence and then it justs a space down making it a little dificult to read becasue one half of the sentence is on one line then the next half is on the next and for every new speaker theres a new line

add more soon!

I hope you like it.. And please some advice for the second chapter would be awesome. Thanks.