Metamorphosis - Comments

I like your descriptions and how you use details, just the right amount of them. It doesn't get boring to read but it doesn't get to plain as well. You have a good vocabulary and you don't use the same words repeatedly which makes it more interesting to read. The character descriptions are very well written and you can easily create a mental image of them.

I like the characters as well, Ivy seems very tough but also looks down on life in a negative way. She doesn't like being alone though that's where Ben comes in. Though she still uses Josh because she's aware of his feelings for her which makes me think maybe she feels something for him too?

In general I like the story, the plot so keep it up! :)

I admit, I forgot this story existed. I re-read it from the beginning and I don't know how I forgot it. It's good and I can't wait for more!

I'm dying. Can't wait for more. :)

This is looking interesting! I'm really into it already.
I think what Ivy did to Josh was pretty shitty, i'm totally on his side, but then she's probably got her reasons for doing such a shitty thing. Time will only tell!
I'm excited to see where this is going!
<3

God, a part of me feels bad for Josh and another part of me feels bad for Ivy. She's such a raw character, her mentality on life is just fucking rough. She's with Ben for the comfort of having another person. She might like him a tad bit or at least could stand him but I think the reason why she stays with him is because she knows that she will never grow attached to him.

And then there's Josh. Poor Josh. He's obviously in love with the girl and she knows it and uses it to her advantage. She's playing with his emotions but for some reason I can't help but to think maybe, just maybe, she might have some sort of feelings towards him. Even the slight bit or at least they will develop.

I honestly can't wait to see what happens next. I honestly just wanted Ivy to just the fuck up and just give Josh want he wants but that would make for a dull story.

Now, could you please update this more often. Like every other day or something like that (; or else I will go down to Texas and kick yo ass bishhhhhhhhh

You know how I used to think you were a goddess, back when I was ChelsieSmile, about 40 billion years ago? Well current Chelsie still thinks that your shit doesn't stink.

Lets do this!

Alright, so starting it out with his gram being soooo fucking cool about this whole scenario is.... so fucking cool. My gram would bust out the fucking holy water if she so much as knew I drank too much occasionally and had the mere thought of sex. But if I were off screwing various people, using the term fucked...she would have my tubes tied immediately.
This grandma though, is my woman.

(it's been forever since I've commented on a story. Do these codes for bold italics even still work? jeez)

"I had made him fall right into a rock in the ground."
Now this bitch is a QUEEN. Even when she was in elementary school she was kicking ass and taking names. Her genetics must have some big plans for her if she started so early.

Ponytail is the greatest car name ever. Just saying.

"I want to have sex with you."
Well hello forward, nice to meet you. I TOLD YOU THIS BITCH IS A QUEEN. Talk about a powerhouse, just chit chatting about life and love then BAM. Poor Josh can't even control himself - this is like what he's been waiting for practically his whole life.

Alright, so he nearly crushes her with the seat going to wrong way and she lies to him about never having had sex before. Seems like an almost fair trade-off.

Loved it! I'm anticipating a very interesting backstory behind Ivy and Josh. I hope you continue to develop the history behind Elissa because the grief she seems to be carrying has me curious :)

Oh god, I fucking love this.

This chapter was so emotional and amazing. I pictured it all so vividly. This is wonderful and I can't wait to see what else you have in store.

I want to see what the fuck happened between her and Josh. Josh obviously found out about her faking her first time or something completely different.

And the past with Elissa, that completely broke my heart.

You are so talented, I know I tell you a lot but you deserve to be told way more.

Update soon!

Remember me?
I decided to come back and check in and saw that you had a lot of new stuff up! This is the only thing I have time to read now but as always it is great. As you have always been able to do, I could see the scenes in my head, down to Anne's "parentheses cheeks" and the selfish way that Ivy manipulates him and the emotional punch in the stomach that realizing that Anne doesn't recognize Elissa brings.
Fantastic.
Ivy did not want to cause anymore problems due to loose lips.
Throughout the last chapter of their history, he had become stone hearted while Ivy was beginning to polish her heart of gold she never knew existed.
Just two bare-knuckled ladies who used whatever resources available to get what they wanted.
They peer into heaven from their place in purgatory. However content they feel, they could be better.
I'll definitely check back in to read more :)

My god Ivy is so entertaining the way she can seduce and manipulate Josh like that is priceless! I love how by her playing the virgin Josh thinks he has full control...he has no idea... This is going to be a good read. Nice job :)

Excellent follow up to the first chapter, please keep it up.

amazing, please update soon :)

This is one of the most amazing first two chapters I have ever read in my entire mibba life. The way your write, you portray, the idea of having his grandmother linked to her and the sex, of course! Fantastic. I have subscribed.

Dangggggggg girl! That whole scene was just WOW. You have a way with words girl. It was steamy and just perfect. Though the whole scene was sexy as fuck, but I have to say when Josh was thinking about having sex with her and the words "O-Ok. Come here." I thought that was by far the highlight of it all.

I really love the direction you're going with this. I wasn't expecting this at all. I really love stories that have to do with the girl being the 'bitch' but I honestly didn't get that from Ivy. She just wanted Josh and as much as she wants to say it was because she was 'bored and horny' there's going to be more to that.

You don't know how stoked I am about this story.

You have to follow through with this! There is so much potential for this story already. Anne and Ivy are very entertaining characters and I'm curious about all the relationship dynamics between Ivy, Anne and Josh. Update soon please :)

have to say, one chapter and I'm hooked. I love your style of writing and can't wait to see more.

You had me with the first sentence in the summary ;D I love the fact it already seems to be turning in to something different than most J.F fanfictions :3 Update soon? ;D

You had me with the first sentence in the summary ;D I love the fact it already seems to be turning in to something different than most J.F fanfictions :3 Update soon? ;D

All I have to say is WOW. It's so fucking perfect. I'm so fucking jealous of your skills girl, I really am. It was so well written and fucking WOW.

First, I think Anne and Ivy are fucking adorable. I love their spunk and just how you wrote them was amazing. And the fact that it's her grandson, hilarious.

Second, I don't think i've ever been so stoked on a story. And this is the first chapter. Just everything about it was so captivating and made me want more. You need to update and update soon!

I think you have an amazing story here, first chapter was great and i'm sure the rest will follow. I'm so curious on how Josh and Ivy met, i'm assuming through his grandmother, and what exactly happened between the two.

Amazing as always (:

Now that i got the full layout, I have to say I'm even more excited. The banner is pretty sick, not gonna lie. And then in the description there is just one sentence. Very simple but the contents it holds, FUCK!

"I should have never asked Josh Franceschi to fuck me."

I'm excited for this shit! (: