June 4th, 2013 at 07:50pm
A Wonderful Surprise - Comments
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I CANNOT WAIT FOR MOVIE NIGHT!!June 4th, 2013 at 06:49pm
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@AmeliaDef you're welcome, I love you too :pMay 11th, 2013 at 04:07pm
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I thought Garrett did sleep with a girl... I WAS ABOUT TO GO ALLL DO XUSISKOSIA and boom. He was dreamingMay 11th, 2013 at 03:55pm
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comment swap-- using single quotes for dialogue is a bit awkward. convention is to use two. aside from that your grammar is solid. the whole chapter i read seems a little stiff, with a lot of dialogue and not too much emotion. that would be my main concern going forward as far as things to fix. aside from that, it was a solid story and your characters are believable. best of luck!September 26th, 2012 at 08:00am
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but well, this story wouldn't be so dramatic if Rachael didn't show up, right right? :p- AmeliaDef:
- on my defense, i didnt give vany the idea to bring up the name rachael... but really though, i dont like her either..
August 30th, 2012 at 12:11am -
on my defense, i didnt give vany the idea to bring up the name rachael... but really though, i dont like her either..- arumdp:
- GARRETT NICKELSEN (or should I write Lia's name instead, remembering that she gave you this plot :p) WHAT ARE YOU DOING WITH RACHAEL?!?! Poor Mary :( What'll happen after this? Can't wait to read it! :D
August 27th, 2012 at 06:17pm -
how to tell lia that you're upset...? :P Yeah, poor mary :( You need to wait for the next chapter, kay? ;)- arumdp:
- GARRETT NICKELSEN (or should I write Lia's name instead, remembering that she gave you this plot :p) WHAT ARE YOU DOING WITH RACHAEL?!?! Poor Mary :( What'll happen after this? Can't wait to read it! :D
August 27th, 2012 at 05:39pm -
GARRETT NICKELSEN (or should I write Lia's name instead, remembering that she gave you this plot :p) WHAT ARE YOU DOING WITH RACHAEL?!?! Poor Mary :( What'll happen after this? Can't wait to read it! :DAugust 27th, 2012 at 02:12pm
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Aye aye! Good to know Garrett's going to stop playing dumb! Mary better stop too or Garrett will get his heart broken.. :pJuly 19th, 2012 at 06:50am
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I got here because of comment Swap and unfortunately this really isn't my cup of tea, but I have read the first chapter and I really like your way of writing. You're definitely a good writer, I'm sorry that I didn't feel like reading a lot more of it, but it really isn't bad at all!June 15th, 2012 at 10:30pm
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both Mary and Garrett has problems of spilling the truth... when will they stop playing dumb? :oJune 15th, 2012 at 01:14pm
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Garrett's last action is so... priceless. He is such a unique person This is a great chapter vanemo! I like the way you ended it. Teehee. Sad no more, because this isn't a crappy update. It's great!!June 14th, 2012 at 07:00pm
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This is a very creative story, and I enjoy the plot that you've set up. It's a very great read. It kept me well entertained and intrigued all throughout reading. Keep up the great work, and hope to see an update soon!June 9th, 2012 at 08:09pm
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GARRETT!! Finally he spilled the beans, gaaah I can't wait to see how Mary would react on the next chapter :)) Great chapter, vanemo!May 13th, 2012 at 03:10pm
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Aaaaah, finally. Mary realized something, Mary realized something~ Does it mean that this story will be ended in a matter of time? :( aaah.April 27th, 2012 at 06:02pm
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In my opinion, Mary deserves a better man. So I'd rather pick Garett-Mary ftw! :D I'm your new subscriber also fan btw. And according to AmeliaDef, it's less of 'who'. Btw hi vany!March 24th, 2012 at 03:09am
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Garrett-Mary! Garrett-Mary! Mary deserves better. Besides, Garrett has been there for her from the start, he has been stuck in the friendzone for years, it's about time.March 14th, 2012 at 11:23pm
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Okay, hi.
Um... I really like the plot and I hope Lisa will show up in Arizona and boom goes the drama. I ship Garrett/Mary, okay? Nick should go back to Braintree and just... I don't know... You can't start a relationship with someone when you're with someone else, Nicholas, seriously!
I like this story a lot. However, I can't help but notice some grammar and spelling mistakes here and there so I thought I'd point it out to you.
Keep going! Please let Mary end up with Garrett please...March 13th, 2012 at 02:56am -
....PLAN D! Gyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa! it's great, Vanyyy. Keep it up :D Can't wait to read more, though.January 11th, 2012 at 03:11pm
Anyway... John is being such a cutie, hahah, he's basically craving for cupcakes.
Good chapter, Van! Keep up the good work :)